It’s got an elderly kick-ass demon-assassin, zombies that can think, and a death goddess working at a small press. For that, I can forgive the continuity errors and the occasional odd plot point.
Three things I learned about writing:
- Watch out for the vague "some": "something made her", "something told her", "some sort of sense"...it gets overused too easily.
- Where you start your story affects how sympathetic your protagonist seems. Start it when they're under stress, and readers automatically feel for them. Start it with them relaxed but complaining about how rough they've got it, and readers might not be as charmed.
- Vivid, brief descriptions and snappy dialog can pull a reader through the roughest parts of your story.