“Gothic” in the overwrought, melodramatic sense.
There’s some fantastic ideas in here, but it was tough one for me to finish.
Three things I learned about writing:
- People falling love notice everything about their beloved. If writing from the POV of a character falling in love, their thoughts will dwell on even insignificant details about their beloved.
- Constant repetition of unexplained magical elements makes them annoying and boring. Conserve the magic, to make it interesting.
- Use a deep dive into a character's thoughts during conversation sparingly. Dialog should speed the story along, interrupting the flow with paragraphs of thought undercuts momentum and frustrates readers.