Ron Toland
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  • Keeping Score: March 26, 2021

    Novel's at 38,160 words. The snippets I'm working on are starting to spill over into the next chapter; I'm already scoping out the reactions of the characters to the events of the section I'm working on.

    Meanwhile, this section is winding down. And I'm getting the feeling that much of it -- most of it, even -- might be cut in the next draft. I mean, do I really need to describe how a character makes their camp dinner in such detail? And yet, if I don't do it, I won't know that they keep flour in this jar over there, and that they constantly gather firewood as they travel, so they have a stock of it ready to go when needed. Details like that would be completely lost, if I didn't make a hash out of describing every little action right now. So I keep doing it, knowing that what I'm writing now will likely be cut, but that doesn't mean it won't be used.

    I'm also...well, I'm debating whether to let one of my characters give A Speech at the end of this chapter. They have the words for it -- I've already written the points they want to hammer home -- they have the audience, they have the space and the time. But does the book have the tone for it?

    I usually shy away from having characters make big speeches, or monologues. Blame part of it on a Gen-X thing: I treat displays of sincere emotion with suspicion. Blame another part on my preacher of a father, whose pompous, hypocritical sermons turned me off to religion altogether.

    So I'm always pushing my characters to speak more naturally, to take any Great Wisdom they want to lay down and either show it through their actions or weave it into their dialog some other way.

    But this time...this time I might let them just say what they want to say. Certainly the situation calls for it: a young girl is about to be pushed into an apprenticeship that will change her life, take her away from the family and the place she's always known and send her criss-crossing the world with her mentor. And all because of a decision she made to pursue vengeance for her father's death, that led to a near-deadly encounter with a dragon, and now this. Such sweeping changes, they call for a little more weight to the dialog, yes?

    Oof, I'm uncertain. I'll write the speech, I think, and see how it plays. I can always change it later, right?

    → 8:00 AM, Mar 26
  • Keeping Score: December 18, 2020

    Novel's at around 16,400 words. I haven't done today's writing session, though, so I should finish out the week closer to 17K.

    The deal is working, so far. Holding myself hostage, unable to go for my morning job or take a shower or have breakfast or anything until my writing's done for the day, has been rather effective.

    And I'm looking forward to the weekend again, when I can daydream and doodle and research and not have to worry about hitting a word count. That recharge time is proving important, for my mental health and for my writing.

    Funny, I think I started this year by throwing away word count goals and the idea of penalizing myself for not meeting them. Here I am at the end of the year, once again setting daily word count goals and forcing myself to meet them. It seems not only do different techniques work for different people, different things can work for the same person at different times.

    What about you? What previous writing habit have you brought back this year, if any? Or maybe there's an old trick you've dropped?

    → 9:00 AM, Dec 18
  • Keeping Score: December 4, 2020

    So I didn't win NaNoWriMo this year. It wasn't even close.

    But I'm not quitting on the novel. I've come too far not to see it through.

    And NaNoWriMo has got me flexing my writing muscles again. After today's writing session, I'll have churned out almost 2,000 words in a single week. That's not novel in a month pace, sure, but it's a novel-in-a-few-months-pace, which is better than I've been able to achieve since the pandemic began.

    Even so, I still feel pressed for writing time. I want to brainstorm for a bit, every day, before working on a scene. Or after finishing a scene, reflect on what might be missing from it, what I'll need to add the next day. And that's hard to do, when I've only got thirty minutes or so free to spend on the novel.

    It's good that I've got some vacation coming up at the end of the month, then. That'll certainly give me more time in which to work.

    But I want -- I need -- to carve out more time during a regular work day. Which might mean dropping some of my other hobbies (I've been brushing up my French, and learning Swedish) in order to make that time. Or maybe I'll get up even earlier, so I can make that time at the start of the day.

    Not sure what's best. Gotta figure something out, though.

    What about you? What do you do, when you feel like you're not getting enough writing time?

    → 9:00 AM, Dec 4
  • Keeping Score: November 20, 2020

    Slow but steady.

    I'm at a little more than 7,000 words on the new novel so far this month. Behind where I need to be to finish NaNoWriMo, but further than I was a few weeks ago. That's got to count for something, right?

    Writing during the week has been difficult. Work has been...stressful, and I've needed to come in early and stay late, just to keep up. That's obviously cut into my writing time, but it's also drained my batteries before I even have a chance to sit down at the keyboard for the day's words.

    As a result, while on the weekend I built up to around a thousand words a day, during the week I've fallen back to a few hundred. Sometimes. If I'm lucky.

    There's light at the end of this tunnel, though. I've got a week of vacation coming up. A full week, when I can write at least half the day, before house and family obligations pull me away.

    It might not be enough time, even then, for me to catch up to where I need to be to reach 50K by November 30th.

    But I'm going to try for it, nevertheless.

    Hope your own writing is going well, and if you're trying NaNoWriMo, that you're slaying each day's word count, day by day.

    Onward!

    → 5:00 PM, Nov 20
  • Keeping Score: November 13, 2020

    Work on the novel has been slow but steady this week.

    I’m not getting down more than a few hundred words a day. But I am getting them down.

    The slow pace feels like a lack of time, for me. As in, I don’t seem to have enough time to gather together my thoughts about where the story should go, and then set them down. Like I have just enough time to do one, but not the other.

    And for NaNoWriMo, I need to do both.

    Hoping to be able to make up some lost time this weekend. Wish me luck!

    → 9:01 AM, Nov 13
  • Keeping Score: November 6, 2020

    I thought writing during a pandemic was hard.

    Turns out, writing during a tight election where one of the candidates has spent the last several months shouting "Fraud!" at the top of his lungs whenever someone mentions mail-in voting (while casting his own votes via mail) is even harder.

    So I did start working on a new novel this week, for NaNoWriMo. And I have worked on it each day.

    But I've made very little progress. Only 1,424 words to date.

    I'm trying not to stress about it. I have enough to worry about already, from work happening on the house to day-job deadlines looming next week to the pandemic getting worse in my city to trying to help my wife convince her mother that no, in fact, Biden will not come personally to her house to confiscate the guns she doesn't have and disband the police department.

    It's a lot.

    But I want to tell this story. I've been thinking over these characters for a few months now, and I want to see where they go. I want to show you their world.

    I just have to build it first.

    What about you? If you're doing NaNoWriMo, how is it going?

    → 9:00 AM, Nov 6
  • Keeping Score: August 7, 2020

    I need to get back to working on the novel.

    I've let it sit these past few weeks, untouched, while I finished getting one short story into shape and started plotting a new one.

    But if I'm going to meet my personal deadline of having the novel ready to submit to agents by December 1st, I'm going to need to edit this second draft.

    To be honest, I'm intimidated. I've never edited anything this long before.

    How do I even do it? Read it all through, and then go back and edit passages? That sounds...like it'll take forever.

    Or do I work chapter by chapter, editing each one until it's done, and then moving on? That sounds like an easy way to lose sight of inconsistencies (or to having to go back and edit previous chapters anyway, as inconsistencies show up).

    I think what I'm going to do is a series of editing passes. Pick one thing to look for -- like the consistency of a single character's dialog -- and edit all instances of that. Then pick something else -- the descriptions of a ship, say -- and edit all of those.

    I'm hoping this will give me a structure in which to do multiple reads over the book, without getting lost in the weeds of any individual chapter. And it should broaden my perspective so I can stitch the book together, so to speak, with these edits. Make it more coherent, more whole.

    But what do I do with the short story I've been outlining? I don't want to lose momentum on that. And I worry that the novel, once I start editing it, will take up all the room in my brain for narrative.

    I want to work on both. Use the story as a break from the novel, and use the novel as a break from the story. They're different enough -- one's near-future sci-fi, the other is early modern period fantasy -- that I should be able to keep them separate in my head. And editing is different enough from drafting that I'll be exercising different writing muscles with each.

    What about you? What do you do, when you've got a longer piece to edit and a shorter one to draft? Do you alternate working days? Finish the shorter piece before editing the longer? How do you handle two stories that both need your attention?

    → 8:00 AM, Aug 7
  • Keeping Score: July 31, 2020

    I feel like I'm telling this story to myself, over and over again, with each outline. New details get filled in, new connections appear, with each telling.

    And each day I get up and tell it to myself another time, adding more pieces.

    I so much want to just write, just set the words down on the page and let them fall where they may.

    But then I'll be plotting out the second third of the story, and I'll have an idea that ripples all the way back to the beginning. And it makes me glad I haven't started writing anything more than snippets of dialog just yet. Because all of those snippets will likely need to change.

    This story...It's more complicated than other short stories I've written. Less straightforward.

    It's a five-part structure. One part setup, followed by three parts flashbacks (taking place over years and across continents), followed by a climax. And it all needs to hang together like a coherent whole, present flowing to flashbacks and then returning to the present.

    I'm not sure I can pull it off, to be honest. I'll have to do a good bit of research for each flashback, just to ground them in reality. Then there's the problem of each flashback needing to be its own story, complete with character arc, while feeding into the larger narrative.

    It's like writing four stories at once, really, with them nested inside each other.

    Will it all make sense, in the end? Will the flashbacks prove to be too long, and need culling? Will my framing device be so transparent that it's boring? Will the conclusion be a big enough payoff?

    Who knows?

    All I can do is tell myself the story, piece by piece, over and over again, until I can see it all clearly.

    → 8:00 AM, Jul 31
  • Keeping Score: July 24, 2020

    I've never written a short-story this way before.

    I'm coming at it more like a novel. I'm outlining, then researching things like character names and historical towns to model the setting off of, then revising the outline, rinse, repeat.

    So I've written very little of it, so far. And what I have written -- snippets of dialog and description -- might get thrown out later, as the outline changes.

    I'm not sure it's better, this way. I feel frustrated at times, like I want to just write the thing and get it over with.

    But I know -- well, I feel -- that that will result in a story that's not as good as it could have been. Like eating grapes before they've ripened on the vine.

    And I do keep coming up with more connections between the various pieces of the story, more ways to tie it all together. Each one is an improvement. Each one makes the story stronger.

    Perhaps that's how I'll know when to stop outlining, and start writing? When I literally can't think of any way to make the story itself better?

    How about you? How do you know when it's time to write a story, and when it needs to sit in your mind a little while longer?

    → 8:00 AM, Jul 24
  • Keeping Score: July 17, 2020

    Started drafting a new short story this week.

    I'm taking a different approach, this time. For short stories, I usually just sit down and write it out, all in one go. At least for the first draft.

    For this story, I'm doing a mix of outlining and writing. I jot down lines of dialog as they come to me, or -- in one case -- the whole opening scene came in flash, so I typed it up.

    But the majority of the story is still vague to me, so I'm trying to fill it in via brainstorming and daydreaming. Sketching a map of where it’s taking place, thinking through why the town it’s set in exists, what it’s known for. Drafting histories for the main characters.

    It’s fun, so it’s also hard to convince myself that it’s work. Necessary work, at that.

    Because my guilty writer conscience wants to see words on the page. No matter that I’m not ready, the ideas only half-formed. For it, it’s sentences or nothing.

    So I’m pushing back by reading a book specifically about short story techniques, using the authority of another writer to argue (with my guilt) that it’s okay to pause and think. That progress can mean no words save a character bio. That every story needs a good foundation, and that’s what I’m trying to build.

    It’s working, so far. My guilt does listen, just not always to me.

    What about you? How do you balance the need to feel productive with the background work that every story requires?

    → 8:00 AM, Jul 17
  • The Historian by Elizabeth Kostova

    Masterful. Incredibly well-crafted series of nested narratives that simultaneously did a deep dive into Dracula lore and sucked me into a single family’s generations-long saga. Just…wow. So well done.

    Three things I learned about writing:

    • You can use flashbacks to cover over narrative time that would otherwise be boring, like train (or plane) travel
    • To make an old myth feel fresh, look for the side that's not usually given a starring role (like the Turkish side of the Dracula legend), and explore it.
    • Journals and letters are a great way to both nest stories, and keep each story personal, told by the person that lived it
    → 6:00 AM, Apr 17
  • Emperor of the Eight Islands by Lian Hearn

    Beautiful. Simple, tight prose, telling a deeply moving story.

    Can’t wait to read the next one.

    Three things I learned about writing:

    • What a society condemns is just as important to making it feel lived-in as what it praises.
    • Characters don't always have to be imposing their will on the world. They can show their inner character by the opportunities they take advantage of, as well.
    • In a world of bad choices and flawed people, heroes can be cruel and cowardly, and villains can show mercy.
    → 7:00 AM, Mar 29
  • Getting Back to Work

    Haven’t been able to write since Tuesday. I’ve been too hurt, too confused, too angry to spin up my imagination and write about what’s happening in that other world.

    It doesn’t help that it’s supposed to be a light book, full of whimsy and humor.

    I don’t feel very funny anymore.

    But I’ve got to get back to it.

    Maybe the book will turn out a little darker than I’d intended, now. Or maybe I’ll find a way to recapture the fun spirit I started with, and use the book to remind myself of the good things that are still out there: the wife that loves me, the friends that support me, the peers that understand what’s happening, and forgive.

    But most of all I need to finish it because this book has suddenly become more explicitly political than I intended.

    My main character is a lesbian, which when I started out was just the way the character came into my head. Now it feels like writing her is an act of defiance, a way of pushing back against Trump and his ilk.

    No one else may ever read this book, and it may never be good enough to be published. But damned if I won’t finish it, and make it as good as I can make it.

    Because the importance of minority representation in fiction has just hit home to me, and I want to do my part.

    → 7:00 AM, Nov 11
  • Editing Day

    Today is Editing Day.

    I’ve patched the holes in the plot. I’ve gone through and made the language more consistent. I’ve checked the character’s backstory to make sure it all hangs together.

    Now it’s time to do the cutting. Time to trim away the fat from my descriptions, to cut the unnecessary dialog, to skip over any boring action sequences.

    It’s good I have the day off. I’ll be spending it making the first cuts, and planning the word culling to come.

    → 6:04 AM, Sep 2
  • Lustlocked by Matt Wallace

    Brilliant. Wallace’s writing is as lean and focused as ever, keeping the action moving and the laughs coming.

    Three things I learned about writing:

    • Background action can be sped up, to keep focus on foreground.
    • It's ok to stand up and cheer for your characters once in a while. It gives readers permission to cheer for them, as well.
    • Seeing the consequences of a weird event (transformation, spell effect, etc) before seeing the event itself can make its eventual description less confusing and more interesting.
    → 6:04 AM, Aug 29
  • Chasing the Moon by A. Lee Martinez

    Intimidating. Martinez mixes bits of Cthulhu Mythos with Norse mythology while maintaining a comedic slant throughout. How does he do it?

    Three writing techniques that I think helped him pull it off:

    • Use the mundane to ground bizarre events. That could be the relationship between two characters, or the rhythms of work, or the ubiquity of bureaucracy.
    • When describing weird things happening, a deadpan tone with a bit of sarcasm can both help the reader sympathize with the characters and help them see the humor in the situation.
    • Voice goes a long way in defining a character. If each character has a very distinct voice, then the reader doesn't need as many vocal tags, they don't need as much description of the character, they can build it in their mind from the dialog.
    → 6:00 AM, Jun 27
  • The Golem and the Jinni by Helene Wecker

    Reads like a nineteenth-century fairy tale. Manages to weave these mythical characters into a bigger story about the immigrant experience in 19th century New York. Wonderfully well-done.

    Taught me a few new things about writing:

    • You can use multiple perspectives to build tension into the narrative, by giving the reader access to thoughts and feelings that impact the main characters later on.
    • It's okay to give opinionated descriptions. In fact, letting your character's perspective color the way they describe the world around them is a great way to make both feel more real.
    • Even an absurd premise, if taken seriously enough, can become drama.
    → 10:00 AM, Jan 4
  • The Goblin Emperor by Katherine Addison

    Medieval-level fantasy with goblins and elves, airships and intrigue, and race relations and gender politics and multiple sexual orientations. In a word, awesome.

    Vivid and rich and alive in unexpected ways. The plot is rather basic — outsider unexpectedly inherits the throne, has to learn to rule people that look down on him — but the characters are so interesting, so well fleshed-out, that it held me all the way through. I might just read it again.

    The big writing lesson for me from this book is exactly that: well-written characters that you want to spend time with will compensate for a lot of other shortcomings. For The Goblin Emperor, those shortcomings would normally compel me to stop reading.

    I gave up trying to pronounce many of the fantasy words and names it introduces. The glossary of terms, which I found while desperately searching for some sort of help in keeping terms and titles and characters straight, proved to be worthless. Many of its definitions are either self-referential or refer to other terms which are. There’s also no map, so I had no idea of the relative size or placement of any of the cities and nations mentioned in the book. As some of the intrigue involves trade relations among neighboring realms, this was frustrating.

    But I ultimately didn’t care. I cared about the main character from the first chapter, and cared about the others almost as quickly. I skipped over names, I couldn’t keep any of the titles straight, I had no idea where anything was, and I didn’t care. The main challenges of the book were people, and I wanted the main character to succeed with all of them. Everything else faded away.

    → 7:00 AM, May 11
  • Encouraging News

    First reader review of the novel draft is in! And it’s generally positive!

    True, it’s from a good friend of mine, who’s definitely biased. And yes, he had a list of suggested edits for me, from grammar mistakes to confusing descriptions to scenes that dragged on too long (all of which he’s right about). But overall he liked it, and he wants to read more.

    Maybe it’s not as bad as I feared, after all.

    Or perhaps it is, and he’s seeing past the mistakes to how good the novel could be, if edited into shape.

    Either way, it’s encouraging for me to hear. If I can entertain one person with the first draft, I can entertain more with the second, and even more with the third. It’ll take work to get there, but this kind of validation, however biased it may be, makes me feel like it’ll be worth it.

    → 7:16 AM, May 1
  • Passage by Connie Willis

    A frustrating book, in multiple ways.

    Frustrating because it’s good, it’s really good, for about 2/3 of the book. Like her novel Bellweather, Willis really nails the feeling of trying to get something meaningful done while working inside a vast uncaring bureaucracy. By putting me through the minutiae of the main character’s days – including her thoughts on trying to decide what to eat – Willis pulled me into that character’s head, and gave me just as much emotional stake in her research as she had.

    Frustrating, too, because the payoff kept getting pushed out. All that daily minutiae means it takes a few hundred pages before anything really happens in the book, and another few hundred pages before the next event, and so on. The last hundred pages of the second third of the book I couldn’t stop reading, I had to find out what was going to happen. This was partly because of how involved in the character’s life I’d become, but also because it took those hundred pages for something to occur.

    I can’t decide if that technique is completely unfair to the reader – certainly felt unfair to me at the time – or a master stroke of writing something so addicting it kept me reading long past the point of where I’d have dropped something else.

    I did drop it, though. The main storyline basically ends with Part 2. Part 3 is just other characters scrambling to duplicate the main character’s research from Parts 1 & 2, and by that point I’d gotten so frustrated with the pacing that I just skimmed the rest to confirm my suspicions about the plot, and moved on.

    So I’m taking this book as a warning for my own writing. I think my novel has grown to the length it has partly because of how much time I’ve spent in my main characters' heads, writing out their hopes and fears and internal debates. Looking at Passage, it’s a very powerful technique, but its use has to be balanced carefully against the action and dialogue that moves the story forward. Too much of it, and my story will become one long crawl upwards, with few drops or twists and turns to provide some release.

    → 7:00 AM, Mar 23
  • Achievement Unlocked

    The novel’s done! It’s done it’s done it’s done it’s done!

    Wrote the last 8,000 words or so in a white heat. Actually cried and shook at some of the things I was writing, at some of the pain the characters had to go through to get to the end.

    But they made it, and so did I.

    Going to take some time off writing and let my brain decompress…

    Final word count: 139,528

    → 7:00 AM, Mar 20
  • Can't Talk Now; Writing!

    No real blog post today as I focus on the novel.

    Our intrepid protagonists are sharing a last meal together before they go to face the evil that’s been haunting Skallfast, and I can’t just leave them there :)

    I need to see them, and this, through.

    → 7:00 AM, Mar 16
  • Grinding Toward The End

    126,154 words.

    One of the characters surprised me again this week, committing an act I didn’t think they’d get to in this book, and triggering the start of the climax in the bargain.

    For two full days (and 4,000 words) of writing after that point, it was smooth sailing. Words poured out of me, and I felt like I could do it, I could finish, I knew where things were going and every step of the way there.

    That momentum slowed on Monday, died completely on Tuesday, and hasn’t come back yet. I continue to churn out words, and I still know exactly where things are going as it starts the final climb toward the climax, but I feel like I’m pushing the narrative uphill for each step of that climb, word by word.

    I know that I’ll get there. It’s only a matter of time now, of sitting down and writing each days 1,000 words until I reach that point. That doesn’t make the work any easier, or give me any confidence that the final product will be worth reading.

    But I am going to finish, dammit. If it turns out to be crap, well, that’s what the second draft is for, right?

    → 7:15 AM, Mar 13
  • Ooh, shiny!

    The novel’s grown to 118,051 words.

    Where last week felt like plummeting down the tracks in a mining cart, this week has felt like the slow climb upwards that follows. I keep thinking of new projects I could be working on instead of this one, shiny objects to distract me from finishing.

    Just these past few days I’ve thought of two new novels to write and an iOS game to build. I’ve even caught myself starting to write dialogue in the voice of the narrator from a third novel (also as yet unwritten) while daydreaming.

    I have to keep forcing my attention back to the novel I’ve got, the novel that every day gets longer and every day I feel like I have less grasp of.

    Telling myself its okay for the first draft to suck is dangerous now, because my other projects come rushing in, tempting me with their promise of perfection. I know none of them will be perfect in the end, but I want it, I want to write something brilliant and moving that people will remember when I’m gone. I feel like I can see the flaws in my current work all too clearly, and I these distractions are my unconscious way of doubting that it’s worth finishing.

    → 8:05 AM, Mar 6
  • Hold on to Your Butts

    www.youtube.com/watch

    That’s how I feel, like I’ve turned a corner in one of those old mining carts and found the tracks plunge down into the darkness. At the bottom, the climax is there, waiting for me. I couldn’t stop it happening now even if I tried.

    So I’m holding on as best I can, gripping the sides of the cart as we hurtle down together, my characters and I. I only hope I can type fast enough to capture everything before we hit the bottom, and it’s all over.

    → 10:30 AM, Feb 27
  • Not Done

    83,438 words. Still not done.

    Close to, but not quite, 5,000 words more than last week. Well shy of the 90,000 words I wanted to have done by the end of this month.

    If I manage to crank out 3,000 words today, and do a marathon session of 4,000 words tomorrow, I might just make 90K. I’ll have finally caught up with the flu week, but only if I steal 4 hours or so away from chores and errands.

    And even then, I probably won’t be done.

    I’m into the latter third of the book, but only a few hours into the final day. There’s so much left to have happen, so many events that also need description and character insight and reactions and justifications and dialogue, that…I think I might not be done till I reach 100,000 words, or more.

    On the one hand: hooray for the little story that could, the story I thought would be over so fast I’d have to write three of them to hit the 50K word mark for NaNoWriMo.

    On the other: ye gods, I can’t wait for this thing to be done.

    → 8:00 AM, Jan 30
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